Young generations now spend more time and money following fashion trends. to what extend do you agree or disagree ?
Young generations currently try to keep up with the latest fashion trends. While I agree that this trend might benefit their social relationship, I would argue that the drawbacks are greater.
To begin with, there are several reasons why keeping up with the latest fashion can benefit social life. Firstly, this is an excellent way for young people to beautify themselves when they wear fashionable items such as dress, necklace, and watch. As a result, they might feel more confident in socialising with their peers. Secondly, when they share and discuss new fashion trends with their friends, these conservations will help them blend with their groups. For example, my friends and I always start our conversation about some famous brands' newest shoes. If they do not catch up with fashion, they might be isolated when they do not have the same interest.
However, I believe this tendency is not suitable for young generations. First, most of these people are studying, which means that they are not independent of finance. Therefore, when they do not have enough money to possess fashionable items, they might commit crime to satisfy their needs. For example, in Vietnam, a young boy, who was punished by sending to prison, stole a pair of Nike shoes because of a lack of money. Second, when young people are too addicted to fashion clothing, their study might be neglected. Their academic performance will be negatively affected, and they will fall behind the class. Third, since only affluent students can purchase the latest fashion clothing, they incidentally create a sharp divide between them and poor students.
In conclusion, while I agree that following the newest fashion trends is beneficial to widening social relationships, I do not think this tendency is suitable for the young generations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: brands the newest
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...not have the same interest. However, I believe this tendency is not suitable ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, incidentally, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16271186441 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61681742006 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576271186441 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1224065274 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1875 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5625 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175223860385 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631010651956 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521791296419 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139811079487 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461270711277 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.