Because the future will be dominated by technology we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students If our students take these classes they ll all be able to get high paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives

This speech is flawed in many areas. True that the future will be dominated by technology since it is growing proliferate and one can expect its dominance in the future but that doesn't mean it should be mandated to everyone. The argument is not at all considering the interest of the high school students whether he or she is interested or not in computer programming. And how will the learning of computer programming will beneficial to the student who wants to pursue his career in arts it will be simply wasting his time. Which can be put into better use to shape up his or her future. The argument just assumes that every high school student will be interested in learning computer programming after seeing its growth in industries. The second flaw with the speech is the statement of "high paying programming jobs in the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high paying programming jobs-one cannot guarantee a high paying job to everyone it varies from subject to subject in this case student to student .the argument is assuming that this trend of high paying jobs will continue in the near future which is preposterous because maybe with the increasing opportunities in this field it might create the more in number of programming engineers which may lead to inflation that is supply is exceeding the demand, in such situation getting a job with high salary will be difficult. And now the other part of the statement ,lead a fulfilling life-the argument just assumes that earning money is what makes a life fulfilled which is not true and completely vague. Earning is just a small part of life but doing what interests the person the most and living with the loved ones is what makes the life well lived. What is the use of the money if the person is living a mundane life with no happiness and satisfaction. So it is upto the person to decide what makes his life fulfilled which the argument just assumes that money is solution to all the happiness. So it is not correct to mandate programming classes for everyone. Still they can continue with the classes but choice should be given to students .While explaining the merits and demerits, what is the scope,what kind of work they are going to do in this particular field.

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Average: 6.3 (3 votes)
Essay Categories
GMAT/GRE Argument Task
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ct its dominance in the future but that doesnt mean it should be mandated to everyone....
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 555, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... his time. Which can be put into better use to shape up his or her future. The argu...
^^^
Line 1, column 863, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
... in the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high p...
^
Line 1, column 867, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lets
... the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high paying ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 867, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high paying ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 1044, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... subject in this case student to student .the argument is assuming that this trend...
^^
Line 1, column 1459, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... And now the other part of the statement ,lead a fulfilling life-the argument just...
^^
Line 1, column 1726, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...living with the loved ones is what makes the life well lived. What is the use of ...
^^^
Line 1, column 2062, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ndate programming classes for everyone. Still they can continue with the classes but ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 2141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s but choice should be given to students .While explaining the merits and demerits...
^^
Line 1, column 2143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...but choice should be given to students .While explaining the merits and demerits, wha...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 2202, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , what
...e merits and demerits, what is the scope,what kind of work they are going to do in th...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, still, well, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73924050633 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59997165133 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463291139241 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.227060164 57.8364921388 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 133.714285714 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2142857143 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379334833371 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1220192193 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821341203752 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.379334833371 0.128457276422 295% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.3550499002 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.197005988 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ct its dominance in the future but that doesnt mean it should be mandated to everyone....
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 555, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... his time. Which can be put into better use to shape up his or her future. The argu...
^^^
Line 1, column 863, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
... in the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high p...
^
Line 1, column 867, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lets
... the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high paying ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 867, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... the speech and lead fulfilling lives”. lets break down this statement, high paying ...
^^^^
Line 1, column 1044, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... subject in this case student to student .the argument is assuming that this trend...
^^
Line 1, column 1459, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... And now the other part of the statement ,lead a fulfilling life-the argument just...
^^
Line 1, column 1726, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...living with the loved ones is what makes the life well lived. What is the use of ...
^^^
Line 1, column 2062, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ndate programming classes for everyone. Still they can continue with the classes but ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 2141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s but choice should be given to students .While explaining the merits and demerits...
^^
Line 1, column 2143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...but choice should be given to students .While explaining the merits and demerits, wha...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 2202, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , what
...e merits and demerits, what is the scope,what kind of work they are going to do in th...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, still, well, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73924050633 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59997165133 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463291139241 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 118.227060164 57.8364921388 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 133.714285714 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2142857143 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379334833371 0.218282227539 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1220192193 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821341203752 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.379334833371 0.128457276422 295% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.3550499002 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.197005988 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.