Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Is it a good idea for High School Seniors to take a year off before going to college.
Make sure to use details and examples to illustrate your example.
There is no doubt that students should focus more on their studies besides other activities. Some people think that it is worthy to take a long year break for high school students before starting their college. I am not in favor of this idea because this will make them lazy and irresponsible towards their studies, and they will go one year behind.
To begin with, I firmly believe that our young generation always sneak opportunities to indulge in other entertaining activities. If we allow them to take a one year break before their college classes, they will engage themselves in a lot of good or bad activities. They might start to spend more time with their friends, play video games, and going out. This thing can divert their attention and interest from studies. Moreover, they will become lazy to do their tasks as they will not remain punctual to wake up on time, and go to school. For example, I recently study in an article that there was a college in Georgia where they implied this strategy. They allowed students to take a year off break after finishing their high school to get a fresh start of college studies. Sadly, this effect students in a hasty manner because most of the students became so lazy to attend their classes early in the morning. In addition, students were so use to of their leisure activities that they did not give any importance to studies. They could not pay attention to their studies because they began to prefer social media and friends. That`s why, it is not a good idea for the students to take one year long break before college.
What`s more, by doing so will lead the students to go one year behind. In my view, this is a complete waste of time. This thing has bad impact on their future career as well. One year is a long time to do something, and by covering one year study will lead the students to finish their college early. In this way, they can start their further education to reach their goal. For example, I noticed that one of my uncle`s son took a year long break after high school. When he started his college, he told me that this long break interrupted his flow and motivation in studies. He regret that he wasted his whole year otherwise he can finish his two semesters by this time. If he did not take a year off , he can finish his degree early and get a job which is good for his future. This example demonstrates that high school students should not take such a long break to finish their education on time and get an early job for achieving their goals in life.
In conclusion, although some may disagree, I think that one year long break for students before starting their college is not worthable idea because this can lost their interest in studies by keeping them busy in other extra activities. Moreover, they will also miss their one year in which they can achieve many good things and also speed up their degree process.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 805, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a hasty manner" with adverb for "hasty"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ge studies. Sadly, this effect students in a hasty manner because most of the students became so ...
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Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'regrets'.
Suggestion: regrets
... his flow and motivation in studies. He regret that he wasted his whole year otherwise...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 710, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...this time. If he did not take a year off , he can finish his degree early and get ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57743785851 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33775432289 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42447418738 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5066069131 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0769230769 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1153846154 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171310058659 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618876240674 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576738200893 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124280335285 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247228163732 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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