At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

By improving living conditions and elevating level of healthcare especially in developing countries, the number of newborns are soaring significantly. Also, this pattern have had an increasing slope already in different areas, because by learning how to control some critical situations such as famine, drought, and even wars, now human beings can increase their populations. It seems to me that, the advantages of having young society members outweigh the drawbacks, and I will explain why.

At first, juveniles are the most paramount citizens in each society because they are powerful enough to handle majority of work in different fields without exhaustion. This means that most of companies and organizations try to recruit a youth rather than old staffs because they have more abilities than older adults. For example, they can undertake duties faster, they are more familiar with computer, and because of their body health, getting bored early can not be a common problem among them. Therefore, the efficiency of work would be increased dramatically, leading to economy boost in wider range.

Turning to disadvantages, if society is made up with old people, younger adults have to work more hours, and tolerate the burden of taxes. Therefore, their longevity would be decreased noticeably, and it can cause brain drain. By this I mean that, young adults will try to emigrate to other countries in order to improve the quality of their life by less financial and work hours burdens. The phenomenon of brain drain can add up to the difficulties of remained people who live in former countries, reducing the level of life by lowering economy boost.

To sum up, I tend to say that having young society is compulsory because they can have cooperative and supportive roles, and beneficial effects for older people and society as a whole.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the companies') or simply say ''most companies''.
Suggestion: most of the companies; most companies
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, therefore, for example, i mean, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18394648829 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74768246914 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605351170569 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5186766207 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.166666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118175500714 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420432387446 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301978054943 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717029100142 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227214234692 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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