The vice president of Sartorian wrote a memo inferring that the suspension of alpaca overcoat due to difficulties on supplies five years ago should be lifted, since the company had acquired a new fabric supplier and the decision will increase the profit of the company. However, the argument was based on some unwarranted assumptions, and some assumptions were missing to make the argument more convincing.
The vice president stated that they should start to produce alpaca overcoat with the new supplier. The underlying assumption was that the new supplier could provide wool fabric at least as good as the wool the company obtained five years ago. However, the assumption was not assured in the circumstances. There could be many factors that could lead to low quality or uneven quality of fabrics, such as, the climate changes leading to a bad growing environment for wool. Since the assumption is unwarranted, the argument that starting to produce alpaca overcoats was profitable is unpersuasive. To elaborate, the vice president suggested that resuming the production will apparently be a huge success because of the outcry from their customers when they discontinued the production. Nonetheless, if the quality of the fabric didn't hold up to the standards as it used to be, the production will be an enormous failure since no customer will purchase an overcoat that is rough, wrinkled, and can't keep one warm.
The author also mentioned that no other competitors in the market offers a comparable product, so they can expect the customers have high demand on the item. However, there was a critical assumption needs to be added: there was a high demand overcoats. Five years ago, the alpaca overcoat was popular, but it could be out-fashioned now. If the alpaca overcoat is not in such a high demand, the sells of the overcoat would still be upsetting without any competitor on the market.
To sum up, the memo from the vice president was based on an unwarranted assumption, the new supplier provides wool fabrics which was at least as good as the ones before, and was missing an assumption, the market still crave for the alpaca overcoats as five years ago. The company should not make a decision on whether to resume the production of the alpaca overcoat or not until the assumption listed above is established or proven.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1904 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.882 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.708 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.165 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 825, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...netheless, if the quality of the fabric didnt hold up to the standards as it used to ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 990, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...n overcoat that is rough, wrinkled, and cant keep one warm. The author also menti...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, at least, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01542416452 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78533962937 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467866323907 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2640854904 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.066666667 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224976421411 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800721528438 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815517660622 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152875810929 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502823563587 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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