The debate over what career path will surely lead to success and secure in the future has always been a highly asked question. Personally, I believe that although nowadays diversity and variety in potential careers have risen, none of these careers could not assure you a safe and successful future. I strongly feel this way based on two main reasons which I will discuss in following essay.
To begin with, In the past people usually followed the career of their ancestors. Hence, they had a built up foundation which was ready for reasonable income. For instance, my grandparents started working in agriculture and breeding sheeps because their parents had handed them proper agricultural lands ready for harvesting. Therefore, from the year they started working they had everything ready for them and also, they were familiar with all the plausible difficulties which could occur being ready to face those complexities and make best reactions toward them. Based on reasons stated above in the past people had a higher chance to guarantee a good outcome in their career.
Furthermore, nowadays most technologies have developed astonishingly. This has made it possible for so many people to follow any path they want in any field. As well as that, rivalry and competition has increased by a large scale which forces companies and leaders to either put an effort on presenting a better product or a cheaper one to be able to absorb enough customers. However, in the past this was not the case. In each urban or suburb only a few people had the same job, so they were the only ones who tried to compensate people's needs with no fear that someone else may take over their business.
To conclude, I strongly feel that identification of your field and career was so much easier in the past. This is because in the past people usually took over their family business and had enough information and experience to be successful. Also, there were less competition in the past within each field, giving them a higher chance of success.
- TPO 39 integrated writing 80
- TPO 39 Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure successful future Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO 36 integrated writing
- TPO 50 Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO 35 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The debate over what career path will su...
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Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'make the best'.
Suggestion: make the best
...ng ready to face those complexities and make best reactions toward them. Based on reasons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, as well as, to begin with, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93023255814 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61666663796 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593023255814 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0890469504 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160668335848 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616142415151 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532888024952 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105016432263 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467378671716 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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