People have always demanded to find champions to look up to. However, the impact celebrities and famous people have on younger generations is higher than their impact on elder people. Celebrities are a major part of young people's lives but this is not true for older people. There are several reasons for this matter.
To start, teenagers and young adults are in a stage of life that requires a lot of decision makings. Seeing someone being able to reach their dreams and achieve their goals while being young paints this picture inside their head that they are the perfect role model for them. Suddenly, they can not resist looking up to them, liking what they like and being passionate about their aims. Basically, they start making decisions for themselves based on what they have observed in famous people lives.
Secondly, elder people have so many experience and knowledge and they try to choose rational choices. On the other hand, younger generation tend to be wild and spontaneous. They want to take a leap of fate and risk everything to be one step closer to their dreams. Famous people usually have epic life stories that motivates others not to give up pursuing what they want which make them such important people for younger people.
Last but not least, athletes and famous people usually spend a lot of time trying to entertain people. Young adults and teenagers are in a time zone which most of their time is spent having fun. Although, when people get older they have to assign much more of their time working which will keep them away from all this activities.
To conclude, athletes and celebrities can bring up interesting and effective characteristic in young people and inspire them to chase their dreams fearlessly. This factors cause the important role they have in younger generations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[2]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much experience', 'a good deal of experience'.
Suggestion: much experience; a good deal of experience
...ves. Secondly, elder people have so many experience and knowledge and they try to choose ra...
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Line 7, column 197, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...most of their time is spent having fun. Although, when people get older they have to ass...
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Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...king which will keep them away from all this activities. To conclude, athletes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94462540717 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37865766486 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537459283388 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3249865008 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2941176471 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216910333706 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804790679547 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565183090714 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139598042201 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381581598427 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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