The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The author of the memorandum feels that keeping the college all-female would benefit the college in many ways and therefore is in favor of it. However, I believe that the author's claims are flawed and too presumptuous. The reasons provided by the author to support his stand do not hold any definite grounds and therefore are unpersuasive as it stands. Also, some of the author's claims are based on unsubstantiated assumptions that make the argument weaker and ill-reasoned.
Firstly, the author states that the college should keep on following the century old-tradition rather than bringing about a change to it that would hamper its progress. However, I do not agree with the author's idea. Here, the author is being too presumptuous in saying that the century old tradition will work for the college even now. Technology and people's way of thinking are developing at a rapid pace and new-traditions are brought every day. So to stay on with the past traditions does not guarantee any success in this rapidly modernizing world. Had the author provided any examples of other colleges implementing the same policy and being fruitful in the same, it would have bolstered the author's claims and provided it support.
Moreover, though the faculty members were happy with the change of bringing in coeducation, the author says that more than 80 percent of the students and half of the alumnae were not in favor of it. Here, the author's argument lacks statistical evidences and data which proves the same. It would quite be possible that the college would have had only 50 students and 80 percent of that it a very small number to judge a decision. Similarly, is the case with the alumnae members. There is no clarity, how many people have voted for the same. Also, faculty members should be given more importance and their decision should be more valued as they are more experienced and therefore can provide a better opinion to the change.
Lastly, the author feels that keeping the college all-female would boost the morale among the students and convince the alumnae to keep supporting the college financially. However, I feel here the author's thinking is too narrow-minded and does not take into account the broader perspective. I feel that changing the college to coed will bring much more competition among the students and would lead to highly boost the morale of the students to compete for the best. The author also does not take into account the financial gain the college might be able to get when more students take admission in the college. So, I feel the author needs to broaden his/her thinking to make his argument more believable.
Therefore, in conclusion, I would say that the author's arguments are flawed and based on in cogent reasons. Had the author kept the above suggestions in mind, it would have bolstered the author's claims. The author must work on adding evidences to support the claims and to make the argument well-reasoned and convincing.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 14 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2427 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.844 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.322 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...re are unpersuasive as it stands. Also, some of the authors claims are based on unsubstanti...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...gress. However, I do not agree with the authors idea. Here, the author is being too pre...
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Line 3, column 729, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'supports'?
Suggestion: supports
...ered the authors claims and provided it support. Moreover, though the faculty membe...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...mnae were not in favor of it. Here, the authors argument lacks statistical evidences an...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t be able to get when more students take admission in the college. So, I feel the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to make his argument more believable. Therefore, in conclusion, I would say th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... argument well-reasoned and convincing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, lastly, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2477.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 500.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.954 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64951240797 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1178076616 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.208333333 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12931936312 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435216158284 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688174858996 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805968088095 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588707337167 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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