Agree or disagree?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
The importance of individuals' endeavor toward reaching success has been rarely doubted by people, but there has been always different approaches toward success. Some people believe it's more intelligent to focus only on their current skills and avoid other things in order to exploit the most from their time, while others think learning new things and risk-taking are important characteristics of successful people. Although each of these groups have emerged successful individuals, it seems that constant learning and risk taking are inseparable aspects of successful ones. This is demonstrated in this essay by looking at important needs of the rapid changing age of technology and also the necessity of risk-taking in a great tournoment of success, established by todays’ world population.
Can we find anyone successful in his expertise in this rapid changing world who doesn't learn and utilize the fast brand new technologies introduced in his field? It is believed that one of the first aims of technology and science is to help doing everything faster and more efficient than before, so in the great tournoment toward success, even small changes in the pace can lead to overtaking many rivals. To be more specific, everyday lots of new gadgets and tools are introduced in each area which are designed by groups of creative designers to make processes easier or help accelerating them. These technologies are getting vital equipments of doing a decent job, which using them requires everyday and constant learning. Thus, this makes it clear why constant learning is vital in this ever-changing world.
Secondly, the recent growth in the worlds’ population, has almost made it impossible to be a successful one without taking risks. Risk-taking is believed to make the way much easier by creating opportunities which make people much more significant than their competitors. This fact can be seen in the life of Warren Buffet, one of the most successful individuals in the world, who has gained his wealth through a highly risk-taking job, stock trade. His possessions are so much that can not be gained through hundreds years of constant working as a professional. Therefore, no doubts remain in the importance of risk-taking toward being magnificent throughout life.
In conclusion, the pace of technology advancements and the great population of people who try for achieving success, made us clear in the importance of both constant learning and risk-taking. Consequently, being the one who does the thing which he knows how to do well, is not considered as a good approach toward success. Although by doing this, the one will end higher than average, evidences has shown top of the mountain is waiting for the other group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has rarely been
...iduals endeavor toward reaching success has been rarely doubted by people, but there has been a...
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Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ertise in this rapid changing world who doesnt learn and utilize the fast brand new te...
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Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
...ms of technology and science is to help doing everything faster and more efficient th...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to accelerate' or 'accelerate'.
Suggestion: to accelerate; accelerate
...igners to make processes easier or help accelerating them. These technologies are getting vi...
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Line 3, column 696, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...a decent job, which using them requires everyday and constant learning. Thus, this makes...
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Line 7, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to do well, is not considered as a good approach toward success. Although by doi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22902494331 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92376172394 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528344671202 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.4102363127 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.647058824 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9411764706 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249815533764 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800835481705 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556515109781 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160111658439 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603998027482 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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