From the perspective of some people,(the#) secondary education is not necessary in countries with a high unemployment rate. Although I accept that this issue may appear logical, but I would argue this is a narrow perspective and I completely disagree with this statement.
To begin with, firstly, the knowledge and skills of worker supply is a key factor in determining (the) both business and economic growth. So developing countries with a significant supply of skilled workers, brought on through formal education as well as vocational training, are often able to capitalize on this trough the value-added industries. Therefore, reducing the level of education in countries with economic problems not only could not help to improve the situation but also it could worsen their economic performances. Furthermore, in today’s volatile global economy, any countries’ employment situation is subject to rapid changes and it is hard to predict how many highly-educated young will be required for a nation’s workforce, as result young people must have the tools and knowledge to adapt to that changes.
Secondly, I contend that the purpose of education is much more fundamental than preparing the young for the work world. During the secondary education system, students learn essential life skills that are useful for their future living, including, start to apply the knowledge to actual life situations, how to express their opinion and ideas, how to form and obtain short and long term goals, and how to balance responsibilities.
In conclusion, it is true that many countries are facing unemployment problems but this does not mean that we should eliminate secondary education to solve the issues because Secondary education has positive effects on the unemployment rate and could equip young people with essential life skills.
From the perspective of some people, secondary education is not necessary in countries with a high unemployment rate. Although I accept that this issue may appear logical, but I would argue this is a narrow perspective and I completely disagree with this statement.
To begin with, firstly, the knowledge and skills of worker supply is a key factor in determining both business and economic growth. So developing countries with a significant supply of skilled workers, brought on through formal education as well as vocational training, are often able to capitalize on this trough the value-added industries. Therefore, reducing the level of education in countries with economic problems not only could not help to improve the situation but also it could worsen their economic performances. Furthermore, in today’s volatile global economy, any countries’ employment situation is subject to rapid changes and it is hard to predict how many highly-educated young will be required for a nation’s workforce, as result young people must have the tools and knowledge to adapt to that changes.
Secondly, I contend that the purpose of education is much more fundamental than preparing the young for the work world. During the secondary education system, students learn essential life skills that are useful for their future living, including, start to apply the knowledge to actual life situations, how to express their opinion and ideas, how to form and obtain short and long term goals, and how to balance responsibilities.
In conclusion, it is true that many countries are facing unemployment problems but this does not mean that we should eliminate secondary education to solve the issues because Secondary education has positive effects on the unemployment rate and could equip young people with essential life skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...er supply is a key factor in determining both business and economic growth. So de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in short, as well as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41608391608 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98273062635 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58041958042 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.6320372677 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.111111111 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7777777778 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.6666666667 7.06120827912 236% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4469344795 0.244688304435 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195813056325 0.084324248473 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.214665205748 0.0667982634062 321% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331773111427 0.151304729494 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.326881659627 0.056905535591 574% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.75 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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