It has been argued that a country becomes way more appealing and develops rapidly if it has citizens of various nations. However, this essay firmly disagrees with the asserted notion since cultural diversity or a nation's being cosmopolitan never guarantees the welfare of a country and doesn't contribute as much as inventions or education.
The factor of owning the most multinational place in the world has never ensured the success for one nation. Moreover, countries that include population from different nationalities and cultures often experience social issues which lead to civil and political unrest and hatred for each other. People from different backgrounds view things differently and have their own opinion towards values. If not dealt with appropriately, it may cause ethnic conflicts. For instance, one of the biggest nomadic countries in Central Asia, Kazakhstan couldn't deal with a plain and scarce conflict between two diasporas of Uighurs and Chinese people on its territory. Furthermore, the dispute became a large-scale issue which resulted in members of both nations being executed and a "bad" relationship between the two.
Additionally, to accomplish the well-being of a country, heterogeneousness must not be the chief aim. In other words, things such as technological advances, quality education, addictive pop-culture, medical achievements, and providing support to small-business owners could be the cause of embodying the word "developed country". For example, South Korea a country that considered to be in the third world, has been embedding for the last 40 years the significant importance of education which resulted in them becoming the 12th economically robust country and in emerging conglomerations with an immense impact such as Samsung, Hyundai, KIA along with big show-business lucrative companies such as SM Entertainment that contribute over 1.3 trillion WON or 1.2 billion dollars to the GDP.
In conclusion, a mixture of nationalities doesn't provide one a guarantee that one will rocket and stand along with the US neither it plays a key role in the development of the nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, third, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54268292683 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25533813196 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637195121951 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.0015431978 49.4020404114 200% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 151.5 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159343965882 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553633437374 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534443099982 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102722103019 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044690113391 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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