The debate over whether people should preserve historical customs and traditional life practices has been heated over the last decades. In my view, I firmly believe if any traditions and customs involving misconceptions and misbelieves should not exist anymore.
First of all, certain life practices in a traditional way have been proved unhealthy, and hence should be either modified or avoided. The old generations had their own beliefs on how to eat and live healthily, which were mainly based on life experiences not science. Nowadays, advanced scientific technologies have discovered that some of the practices can cause significant harm. For example, traditionally, many people fed newborns with water at birth as they assumed it was beneficial for hydration. However, science highly recommends that people feed babies with breast milk or infant formula solely because water interrupts formula intake and threatens the balanced environment for “good bacteria” growth in the gastrointestinal system.
Meanwhile, if there are some customs having underlying misbelieves, resulting in severe consequences such as brutal discriminations and even breaching human rights, they should be strictly prohibited. One sad story can be seen in some Indian remote villages. Because local people consider when women have their periods, they are too dirty to be kept in the house. To avoid bad luck and evil energy for the whole family, especially for their husbands, the poor women are restricted into a dark room with cold water, dirty foods, and poor sanitation. This practice not only physically causes women diseases due to bad hygiene, but also is considerably detrimental to their mental health and human rights.
Admittedly, the healthy customs and practices with valuable beliefs should be well-kept such as the family get-together traditions during Christmas and Chinse new year, as well as Thanksgiving to show gratitude to others. However, those carrying wrong believes and distorted values ought to be left behind and vanish forever.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a traditional way" with adverb for "traditional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... First of all, certain life practices in a traditional way have been proved unhealthy, and hence s...
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Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...tific technologies have discovered that some of the practices can cause significant harm. F...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, well, while, for example, such as, as well as, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50961538462 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86655134567 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2652657287 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.785714286 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128602346806 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045624251058 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316185707719 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078758395687 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355054018477 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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