In spite of many advance women have made in education and employment they continue to be at a disadvantage when it comes to pay and promotion In your view what should be done to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In spite of many advance women have made in education and employment they continue to be at a disadvantage when it comes to pay and promotion In your view what should be done to promote equality of opportunity for men and women in the workplace

In recent years, the world has recognized the important role of women in many fields such as education or labor, however, the females still tend to suffer a large amount of injustice when their superiors consider paying or offering a promote higher positions. In my opinion, there are several effective ways to increase gender equality between men and women in the job environment, which will be outlined in my essay.
The fact is that most people think that men are more likely to perform better in all fields than women, we can list one area where job content seems to be For men eg space science, computer, military, mechanics, mining, rescue, police. While many people forget that women also achieved achievements not inferior to men in areas such as sales, education, art, cooking, even some high-tech industries such as biomedical and chemical. born. Therefore, to improve gender equality in the working environment is essential in a civilized and modern society. In my opinion, there are some obvious measures as follows:
Firstly, social organizations, the media need to raise people's awareness of the role of women in all fields. Some countries already have a Women's Union like Vietnam, which plays a role in protecting and supporting women in all matters of life such as education, health, and violence against violence. family. The effective operation of this association leads to a high proportion of Vietnamese women in parliamentary positions as well as key leadership positions in large enterprises. Therefore, other countries should learn from Vietnam to set up organizations to protect and enhance the role of women. Secondly, women have to fight for themselves to improve their position at the same time to combat these societal pressures and dismiss gender misconception. They have to bravely claim legitimate rights at work if the performance of their work is equal to that of men, which can be cited as an example of the case of awards for female tennis players Grandslam Prize. In the past, women's awards were only half that of men, however, female tennis players have united and submitted claims to the tennis world federation to claim the men's awards and succeed. This shows that if women unite and make reasonable proposals, more equitable treatment. Besides, women also need to be shared by men, especially household chores such as taking care of children, culinary... because women also work 8 hours a day like a herd. therefore, after finishing the job, they also need to rest and re-create their labor force.
In conclusion, all work environments witnessed the great role of women, not only the raising awareness of society but also the fighting of the women about their position are extremely important. Each country needs to combine the two to promote gender equality.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, even so, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 41.998997996 160% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 1615.20841683 145% => OK
No of words: 460.0 315.596192385 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09782608696 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71630500026 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 176.041082164 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558695652174 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 506.74238477 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9795284876 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.277777778 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5555555556 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268208881989 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081494262648 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366761085896 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159841262197 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492331525849 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, even so, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments