In the hectic college life, breaks between semesters are great opportunities for students to relax and to improve themselves in various ways. Some universities require students to enroll in a course that has no direct relationships with their majors; others encourage students to volunteer at the local communities in the universities’ city or their hometowns. In my opinion, having students volunteer in the universities’ city or their home cities is more beneficial for college students because it not only allows students to gain new skills and boost their social skills, but also release their stress and creates a positive mood.
Volunteering enables students to acquire new skills and improve social skills. Volunteer work requires skills that may not be required while studying at universities. By working on various projects and solving different problems, students are able to attain new skills and practical experiences, which could have a positive impact on their future careers. Volunteer work also involves people from different walks of life. Students are able to learn from those people and develop their social skills while interacting with them. In contrast, taking a course differing from a student’s major is less likely to provide them with practical experiences or new skills in a real-life setting. Since students mainly interact with their peers or professors, it does not help students improve their social skills as much. For example, one of my friends got a chance to volunteer at the local newspaper company last summer break. She learned how a newspaper company works and how to edit content properly before publishing. It also boosted her social skills, especially in interacting with editors, authors, and company managers. The skills she acquired in this experience played a significant role in helping her obtain her current job. Hence, volunteering benefits students more because it allows them to attain new skills and improve social skills.
Another benefit that volunteering has is that it can counteract the effects of stress and boost mood. While people are helping others, they forget about their issues but only focus on others’ problems. Participating in volunteer work also allows people to form meaningful connections with other individuals, which reduces volunteers’ stress as well. In addition, by measuring brain activities and hormones, researchers at PeKing University discovered that humans feel immense pleasure while helping others. Thus, providing service to others can boost mood. On the contrary, studying a new subject during breaks is unlikely to be stress-relieving. Instead, it may cause more pressure since it entails hard work to pass the course. It does not have much positive effect on students’ mood either since it may produce pressure for passing the course. For instance, my sister was able to volunteer at the local nursing home this past winter break. She expressed that going to the nursing home was the most effective way for her to release her stress. Through interacting with and caring for the older people, she became more loving, and her days were filled with happiness. She told me that she would volunteer there whenever she could even during semesters. Thus, volunteering can reduce stress and elevate mood.
In sum, volunteering provides opportunities for students to acquire new skills and enhance social skills. It can also reduce stress and improve one’s mood. Due to these two reasons, it is more beneficial for students at universities to volunteer in their hometown or the city where their universities are located.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3057.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 569.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37258347979 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80192633201 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471001757469 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 920.7 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6694742169 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6129032258 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3548387097 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29032258065 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243283081336 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660542069252 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718239552975 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194372025812 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935834924092 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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