As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break. （选1）
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary children with their homework.)
Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why?
With the rapid development of the society, intelligent graduates as well as youngsters with volunteer experience during collage are being required. This phenomenon facilitates a number of universities to make relevant courses about both directions. Thus, a heated debate raises: whether students should take a subject which is not closely related to their major, or they should volunteer to work for their school or own hometown. Although people are almost the fan of the latter idea, I advocate the former one for the following reasons.
First and foremost, taking courses on other subjects can inspire students’ interest to a different yet unfamiliar field, which may indirectly benefit them in their major study. As is known to all, the more knowledge you know, the wider and deeper comprehensive about your major you will have, for knowledge is not fixed a stone. This is because people can consider a problem from many perspectives, using knowledge from several fields. An illustrating example is my brother Jackson, a student majoring in modern arts, who was required to learn Japanese in the long break before collage. At first he was unwilling to learn a language as it seems useless for his major. However, thanks to his foundation in Japanese, he was able to understand some complex concepts put by Japanese artist easily, as their theories are well-known around the art world, which save him much time spending on the meaning of the words.
Another point worth mentioning is that students can get motivated to devote themselves to their coming study life. There is no doubt that university is a heaven for most students to pursue their academic dreams. Nevertheless, the number of students who still indulge in their summer holiday without thinking about a practical plan about their study is increasing. It is not hard to imagine if they embrace their new collage life in this lazy way, numerous time will be wasted due to their lack of enthusiastic and conscious. Whereas things will become totally different provided that they are asked to take some courses, which can stimulus students to prepare for the new semester actively with full energy.
Admittedly, being a volunteer in student’s own hometown or the university’s city can boost their awareness morally by them contributing their part as a gratitude to society. However, sufficient attention should be paid more to the academic function of the university, which is of vital importance in one’s whole life.
To put it into a nutshell, there is no excuse for universities not to request students to take courses on subjects beside their own majors with respect to the necessities I listed above. I hold a strong believe that more students will benefit enormously in the long run.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 204, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, whereas, no doubt, you know, as well as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16114790287 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82518622694 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57174392936 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9099417 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.052631579 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8421052632 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261238359676 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821810662235 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676356520611 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158863471779 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560254398133 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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