In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In modern society, both parents are often forced to go to work in order to get more income for the family. This situation can have both positive and negative aspects.
On the one hand, increased income brings improved opportunities for children to enjoy the benefits of civilization. Young people will be provided not only with basic things, but will also have access to hobby classes, sport activities and education, which must be paid additionally. Thus, children will be able to find and develop their talents and more accurately determine their future profession. Also, parents will be able to save enough money to pay for the education of their heirs at a prestigious university or help them with the purchase of housing in the future.
On the other hand, the attention, advice or personal presence of a parent is often important for children, even more than material values. If children are well provided with all the things they want, this does not mean that they are happy. Even rich children can feel lonely and abandoned. In this case, young people may begin to seek understanding in different communities, which sometimes have a devastating effect on the immature person. This can bring problems and negatively affect children's development and their expectations from the world.
In my opinion, the desire of parents to earn more money for their family is an understandable necessity. Responsible parents want to give their child the best they can. But if they do not want to cross the line and to move away from the other children's needs, they must maintain a competent balance between work and family life. In order to avoid feelings of loneliness among the younger generation, parents should find time to take an interest in their children's affairs in daily life, for example to be involved in their heir's hobbies.
In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that children from families in which both parents work receive better living conditions in material terms. Moreover, if parents manage to find a compromise between being busy and taking part in their children's life, then these families will benefit. But if parents miss the moments when it is necessary to pay more attention to the family than to work, then this can lead to problems in mutual understanding within the family.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... negatively affect childrens development and their expectations from the world. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 384.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.015625 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65250450799 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5390625 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1442628229 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333953750687 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108244921036 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612657588794 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193711391129 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741525880514 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.