Although the years you spend on your education are very important, but many people believe that after finishing the high school and starting with the further education is the most crucial one that decides their future. Some experts assert that new adults should go on a trip or experience a job before starting their university studies because it has various benefits like being independent and confident. On the contrary, others claim that the students should study continuously and a year of travel or job will not be significant. I personally share the former view point, but I will explain both the ideas in the passage below.
New adults want more experience to get a broader view towards life and travelling to different places or working will make them confident and independent. Working or travelling alone will make them come out of their parent’s shadow and dealing with various problems will improve their character, helping them cope up with the challenges of the real world. We can see this when a person deals with a wide range of colleagues or customers and share the job responsibilities at work , this teaches him / her to solve the problems and overcome the obstacles. He may get himself indulged in some internship on a stipend, which eventually imparts practical knowledge. The practical know-how is absent in academics and even if it is there, it is up to a very limited extent.
Even though the idea of taking a year break sounds exciting, but there are some arguments against this view. People may find it difficult to adapt to the studies again. Some might even forgo the thought of studying completely. Many professors believe that the students forget the concepts and lessons learned because of the gap, which has adversely affected their learning ability. Students may think that working full-time is better because they don’t want to come out of their comfort zone. They may fall for the money and forget the importance of being academically strong. Taking an example of a student who wanted to a be a successful doctor, he started working with a hospital performing a small-scale job in the break and completely dumped his dream of becoming a successful medical practitioner.
It seems to me personally that the break students take to travel or work is more sustainable, provided, the teenagers should not get derailed from their long- term goals. Having strong academic background is as important as the work experience and the ideal combination of these two leads to a successful career.
- In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this 56
- In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this 63
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91211401425 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64319001832 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534441805226 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 421.0 20.2975951904 2074% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2068.0 106.682146367 1938% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 421.0 20.7667163134 2027% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 33.0 7.06120827912 467% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178142872708 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178142872708 0.084324248473 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102527571792 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490393192512 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 212.2 13.0946893788 1621% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -347.38 50.2224549098 -692% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 166.3 11.3001002004 1472% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.68 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 28.04 8.58950901804 326% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 9.78957915832 592% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 170.4 10.1190380762 1684% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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