Obesity- related diseases are becoming more and more popular among society, which may put the patient’s health at risk. An underlying reason can now be outlined together with a pragmatic remedy offered below.
The popularity of unhealthy food and drinks may mainly contribute to this alarming issue. It has been proven that the escalating rate of obesity- the precursor to several underlying diseases like diabetes or hypertension, mainly in developed countries, is directly proportional to the mass expansion of fast-food outlets. Perhaps the accessibility and cheap prices of fried chicken, hamburger and sugar- contained beverages like Coca has been making themself attractive to most age brackets since their introduction to the market. As a result, excessive amounts of saturated fat and other nutrition may be absorbed, which then will be converted into energy through digestion. Only a certain fraction of them is absorbed while the remaining will be turned into fat.
Bariatric surgeries- which has recently gained trust, may help avert the obesity crisis by suppressing people’s appetites. Supposing parts of the stomach are removed by undergoing a laparoscopic gastric procedure, the patient’s stomach will not be able to hold much food and they will be more likely to feel full sooner. A same outcome can be seen in gastric bypass- another type of weight- loss surgery, performed by joining the top part of the stomach with the small intestine. Restricting the food intake by undergoing operations like these has been advocated by many scientists considering their ever-lasting effects as well as the availability of the surgical instruments needed.
To conclude, the fast food’s ubiquity is mainly responsible for the surge of obese patients. Encouraging people to undergo bariatric procedures may be the best solution to alleviate this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the remaining will be turned into fat. Bariatric surgeries- which has recently ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, so, then, well, while, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49480968858 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93009105721 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650519031142 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4622420214 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.153846154 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1496560978 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536291136871 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419123379726 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100715696574 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027248093005 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.46 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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