The graph below shows the way people of some country invested their money during the years 2001-2006.
The bar graph compares the investment ways of people’s money in Somecountry between the years 2001 and 2006. It can be clearly seen that the amount of money which was spent in stocks was approximately twice as much as the amount of money that spent in bonds.
According to the graph, in 2001 and 2002, people of Somecountry invested about 100 billion in bonds and about twice in stocks. The number of investments increased by 50 billion for bonds and over 20 billion for stocks in 2003.
In the second years of the period, the investments in stocks have grown up enormously. It recorded almost equally in 2004 and 2005, 289 and 297 respectively, while in 2006 it peaked significantly at 311 billion. In contrast, the increase in the invested bonds was slightly and steadily. It reached 162 billion in 2004 whereas it was almost similar in 2005 and 2006, 179 and 188 respectively.
Overall, people in Somecountry have preferred to invest their money in stocks market than bonds.
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Overall, during the six years
Overall, during the six years period, people in Somecountry have been investing more billions in the stock market than the bond one.
people in Somecountry have preferred to invest their money in stocks market than bonds.
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