Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
In today's materialistic driven world, everyone is seeking ways to get a well-paid job and a successful occupation. While some people contend that this can be achieved by gething tertiary education, others believe that working after high school is more beneficial. From my point of view, although the latter may seem justifiable, I tend towards the idea that people should study at the university for a better future job.
On the one hand, partaking in the manual labor and job market early after school can bring sooner financial-related advantages. It is obvious that for the students who come from marginalized areas or impoverished families, working earlier is more suitable for their conditions. Those students can contribute to their family's pocket and save an astronomical amount of tuition fee, campus fee and the like. In addition, the earlier people start up, the more certain their position in the company is as they can be deemed as seniors as against their peers. For example, unlike other friends spending 4 or 5 years studying at the college, those young employees have already got a stable job and made a living. That is the reason why many people pour into the job market after high school.
On the other, I believe the education people get from university can better prepare them for a more prospective career. Firstly, undergraduates will appear with higher employability if they have qualified certificates and diplomas. According to some research, 80% of the businesses are more inclined to recruit candidates who excel in their learning at the university. Furthermore, it is not only about the academics but the students can acquire needed skills, which can be transferable to their later job during university. The projects they participate in with friends, the internship they do and etc can equip them with problem-solving skills, team-working skills, to name but a few. As a result, studying at the university can be a precursor for students' better-off life and occupation.
In conclusion, while there are certain benefits to working after school, I am, however, convinced that the university is more conducive to finding well-paid jobs as it offers needed academics and hones the social and working skills of the undergraduates.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 1.00243902439 1197% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 965.302439024 196% => OK
No of words: 366.0 196.424390244 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17486338798 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97137145847 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 106.607317073 194% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565573770492 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 283.868780488 207% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.911211034 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.375 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.23603664747 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284044817135 0.215688989381 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940957423097 0.103423049105 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860683689059 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185324675851 0.15604864568 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911479084585 0.0819641961636 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 61.2550243902 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 40.7170731707 236% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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