Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, with the development of the medical industry, the longevity of human beings has been significantly extending. Therefore, there are several nations permitting the old to maintain working until they decide to retire without a limited age. This regulation can bring more benefits than the downsides.
There are a number of reasons to implement the sanction supporting the idea of extending the working age. Firstly, as mentioned, the advancement in medication leading to the betterment in the treatment for diseases, making humans live longer and healthier compared to past generations. Therefore, governments should enact new policies to let the old determine the retirement age based on their health status. Secondly, given the current economic situation, the inflation and increased price for merchandise, by maintaining a working state in the favor of senior citizens, they would be able to contribute to financing their family rather than being considered as the financial burden.
There are more compelling reasons to justify the advantages of this initiative. According to some medical research, when the average age is considerably extended, if the old retire in compliance with the legal regulations at a certain age, they will have decades left without working or dedicating to anything, which would easily result in dementia earlier or even depression as they lose their life purpose. In addition, in order to conduct the idea more efficiently, government agencies could offer new policies such as tax deduction and healthcare for the enterprises recruiting the senior workforce, this will act as the incentive for these organizations specifically and the national economy as a whole.
In conclusion, it is evident that the benefits of allowing the old to decide whenever they are willing to retire are broad-based. Consequently, the government and companies should have the tight cooperation and coordination to expedite the offered initiative.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54785478548 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05166868504 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600660066007 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.896014826 49.4020404114 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.083333333 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178871088869 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622772050332 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635608406012 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10708005603 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150013818862 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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