Topic 6
Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author provides us with two pieces of information that, the arctic deer populations are declining and that the recent global warming trends have caused the sea ice to melt, which led to deers not being able to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen see, and thus resulting in the decline in their populations. however, the author supports his conclusion with assumptions that, if not substantiated, would weaken the persuasiveness of the argument.
Firstly, the we are provided with the information about the eating habits of arctic deers and their preferable habitat locations. it was mentioned that they limit their habitat to areas warm enough to sustain the plants which they feed on, and once they are done, they move over ice from one island to another in search of food. however, we might want to know additional information about how long do the deers tend to stay on an island. if it is the case that, a particular island on which the deers on feeding on has relatively lesser vegetation or if the deers have consumed all the available plants of that island , they then decide to move on to the next island. But if it the case that, the time at which these deers set out their journey to another island also happens coincide with time of warmer season of the year, it is very much likely that there aren't yet enough ice covered areas available for the deers to travel, thus leading them to die out of starvation. if it is the case, then author's contention does not hold water.
Secondly, we are told that according to the reports from "local hunters" . we might want to make how precise are these reports considering that there weren't any data points or numbers clearly indicating the decline in the population of the arctic deers. it might not be proper to draw such broad conclusions without actually confirming the correct numbers of both the aforementioned reports. Even if it is the case that, the numbers of global warming reports are matching with the reports of the deer population, is it right to say that it is the global warming and melting of ice that has led to their decrease in number. it might be the case that, there was an increase in the activities of hunting down of these very deers by the local hunters for poaching and other illegal activities and are only trying to cover up by putting to blame the global warming.
Hence, more information is needed to evaluate this argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 1966 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.593 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.438 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 61.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 28.068 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.452 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.785 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.197 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'we'?
Suggestion: the; we
...uasiveness of the argument. Firstly, the we are provided with the information about...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...and their preferable habitat locations. it was mentioned that they limit their hab...
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Suggestion: However
...ne island to another in search of food. however, we might want to know additional infor...
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Line 3, column 439, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: If
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... all the available plants of that island , they then decide to move on to the next...
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Suggestion: aren't
...year, it is very much likely that there arent yet enough ice covered areas available ...
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Suggestion: If
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Suggestion: .
...e reports from 'local hunters' . we might want to make how precise are t...
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Suggestion: We
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
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Suggestion: It
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Suggestion: It
...at has led to their decrease in number. it might be the case that, there was an in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75117370892 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54387647848 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495305164319 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.4252289493 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.571428571 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4285714286 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344557102088 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104293163135 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140423473377 0.0701772020484 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158684119773 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.184757747006 0.0628817314937 294% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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