The following memorandum is from the manager of Bagel Mania Bakery.
Recently Bagel Mania replaced sugar with saccharin, a sugar substitute, throughout its bakeries in the Northeast areas of the USA. Contrary to initial expectations, this change did not have an adverse impact on our customer’s preferences. So far, only 10 percent of our customers have grumbled about this change suggesting that an average of 90 customers out 100 have no issues with the use of saccharin in our baked products. Since our customers have not voiced great concern about the use of saccharin instead of sugar, it is evident that we should implement this change in all the branches of Bagel Mania bakeries in rest of the country.
While the argument detailed in the memorandum seems quite convincing at first sight, upon further reflections reveals that more better alternative explanations are possible that could rival the proposed explanations.
The argument talks of Sugar in the the bakery products getting replaced by saccharin and majority of the customers having no issue with it. It mentions that 90% of the customers do not have any problem with this. While this being true, why 10% of the people grumbled over the change is not justified. It might be the case that these 10% people are more aware and health conscious to know the side effects of saccharine consumption. The remaining 90% people might be unaware about these fact. So, why the 10% people are complaining and is there any important issue they are trying to highlight must be sought after.
Moreover, the argument talks of the customers not voicing any great concern over the change from sugar to saccharine made. This dose not mean that, the change will be accepted everywhere. People in the other parts of the county may be well aware of the side effects of saccharine and making this change in other branches as well will cost the bakery huge losses. Therefore, before implementing this change in the other branches as well, the bakery must conduct surveys at its various shops to know better the customer preferences.
In conclusion, the bakery should asses the complaints and problems of the 10% people. And should take the necessary actions if their problems are genuinely related to any side effects that are caused by saccharine. Further, before implementing the change to all the branches, a deep, through, comprehensive statistical survey must be conducted at each outlet branch to know the customer preferences well and prevent the losses that might incur.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1477 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.579 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.574 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
..., upon further reflections reveals that more better alternative explanations are possible t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld rival the proposed explanations. The argument talks of Sugar in the the b...
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Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...s. The argument talks of Sugar in the the bakery products getting replaced by sac...
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Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...s. The argument talks of Sugar in the the bakery products getting replaced by sac...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this fact' or 'these facts'?
Suggestion: this fact; these facts
...ining 90% people might be unaware about these fact. So, why the 10% people are complaining...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g to highlight must be sought after. Moreover, the argument talks of the cust...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...now better the customer preferences. In conclusion, the bakery should asses t...
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Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...branches, a deep, through, comprehensive statistical survey must be conducted at ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 299.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08695652174 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62948580347 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52508361204 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7579235776 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.642857143 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158299008717 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623023742376 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629575144912 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0858126225913 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606865855687 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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