Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations.
Sentiments diverge on whether people up to date utilize their time to fulfill enjoyment instead of focus on duties and obligations. Although some formidably censure this stance inasmuch as people have to work and follow other’s footstep to become more success, I am in opposition owing to some rational reasons.
To begin with, people rather to follow independent choice since many right given abilities for them to process their own enjoyment. To be more accurate, in the past, the government operated most of activity in an social which means that people who mostly have trouble in financial have to follow the government obligation. Otherwise, nowadays, the available of plenty of job result in the multiple choice for each individual to determine what they desire to do. Furthermore, the government do not offer duties or restrict the capability for individual to have their own personal choice. Leading to the chance for people to process their own interest without worrying about money, which create many phenomena in society such as freelancer, or non-profit job. For instance, my uncle, he has trouble in finding his interesting job. Therefore, he decides to do myriad of job without any concern until he finds his personal enjoyment.
Moreover, when individual works on some of activity relate to their pleasure, they will fully focus and waste a lot of time instead of doing from other instruction. This is because, most of enjoyment seems really need a lot of energy in order to bring back high quality. Hence, with an excellent outcome, more time will be spent on. In addition, putting more effort, time and receive an incredible result always persuade people to keep following their interest which becomes a chain and individual cannot stop or get out. Take my father for example, he has just addicted to making YouTube videos; thus, he spends many nights to learning and making it. Sometimes, I ask him for stop but it is pointless and I can see how focus he is.
In the end, the powerful of independent decision and the behavior in the enjoyment section take up time from each person which lower the permission to do serious duties and obilagations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 210, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...government operated most of activity in an social which means that people who most...
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Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ach person which lower the permission to do serious duties and obilagations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99447513812 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66231279238 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569060773481 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6544096555 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223129005246 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726703959332 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568806117972 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15273392141 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337131559339 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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