What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
At present, the young generation is accused of having no time for doing exercise compared to the elder one. They are also considered to spend excessive time on leisure activities than being active. I do believe that the young generation has an advanced understanding of optimum physical activities while the majority of them work online as technology has allowed them to.
To begin, parents' and grandparents' generation tended to do more exercise rather than the young one as they believed the more exercise the healthier people could be. This old paradigm is not accepted by millennials as they have sufficient ideas of a healthy exercise period. A study in 2010 explained that excessive workouts caused exhaustion and fatigue and the practice of workouts has been done since a long time ago by many people in the past, saying that the newer generation is not involved in such a thought.
Moreover, technology development has changed the way young people spend their time. Many of them work as streamers for online games, social media experts, and content creators which makes them online more than ever, making them more active virtually than offline. For instance, a study in Indonesia in 2015 noted there was an increasing number of young businessmen and businesswomen involved in virtual business sectors as the social media and tv channels based on the Internet connection.
To sum up, the development of technology allows the young generation to work online as most of the time being misperceived as too lazy in terms of activity while the lesser time taken by them for exercise comes as an optimum daily exercise is widely known as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considered spending'.
Suggestion: considered spending
...ompared to the elder one. They are also considered to spend an excessive time on leisure activities...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... as they believed the more exercise the more healthier people could be. This old paradigm are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so, well, while, as to, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09225092251 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6648965181 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564575645756 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.711054253 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172647378469 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717440336226 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459664213086 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107253048276 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203971461146 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.