The government should allocate more funds to public services instead of wasting money on arts such as music painting and so on Do you agree or disagree with this statement Give your own opinion

Essay topics:

The government should allocate more funds to public services instead of wasting money on arts such as music, painting and so on. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

The manner in which the budget of a country should be invested is extremely debatable. Presently, it is argued that instead of spending on art and cultural activities, employing public funds for the communal services holds tremendous importance. Here, I would like to accord with the given statement.

Numerous points can be put down to support my point of view. First and foremost, Education and employment are the most pressing needs in some countries. Therefore, such public services deserve more attention than art and music. Taking the example of my country, India, into consideration, my country is a developing country and it is densely populated. Providing quality education and employment opportunities to such large population requires a huge investment of public funds. A number of schools are required to be made so that students of all categories and castes can become educated. In addition, the establishment of new factories, industries and complexes is the strongest solution to address unemployment and a huge investment is needed to make it happen. It is, thus, quite clear that education and employment services should be kept on the top of the table of priority lists. Otherwise, financial investment made for music and art, ignoring such public services, would definitely be considered a waste of public funds.

Further emphasizing on my point of view, health and transport are two another basic needs which should be placed above cultural activities.
To be specific, in some developing and under developed nations, the standard of health services is not up to the mark. Therefore, a massive number of people who die out because of diseases would be saved if advancement is brought in the health sector by making investments in the medical researches. Besides this, development in the transport especially in the rural areas is already in great demand in the countries. Hence, basic communal amenities are of greater significance than music and art.

To recapitulate, undeniably, taking care of cultural heritage by encouraging art activities is meaningful. I, however, still believe that in the existence of illiteracy, unemployment and average health system, the promotion of art and music is undoubtedly a waste of money. Thence, above mentioned public facilities need improvement first than anything else.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...considered a waste of public funds. Further emphasizing on my point of view, health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.3376753507 300% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38043478261 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02474826711 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554347826087 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9824957445 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189234680563 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564050037061 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615214908632 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0978575723177 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523314495005 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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