It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days, having a place in university is always a big dream for young people. Some people think that it is worthwhile and impossible to provide university to as many young people as possible. Personally ,this essay will explain why i am against this conviction
On the one hand,I admit that allowing more students to join university might carry a potential negative.To begin with, having plenty of students studying at the university can lead to a lack in the manual workers. As these students tend to choose white-collar jobs rather than blue-collar ones.The farming work in Vietnam, for example, is likely to diminish since youngsters often do not want to work in the hot weather and because of its heavyweight. Therefore ,it would be challenging for the university to have a significant number of students study in their place.
At the same time, I believe that with a huge shortage of students at universities, money can be a significant problem. This is because most universities receive funding from their students. For example, In every university in Vietnam, they always need money to pay the salary of the teachers in school and use it to upgrade or repair any infrastructure that may become obsolete. Therefore, the more students enroll in university, the more money that university will receive. In addition, having a university degree has a vital role in this knowledge- based society so that it might be difficult for students in the present day to seek a job, since many companies often prefer those who have tertiary education over those who do not. As a result, most young people seem to be so hard-working in order to get a place in university.
In conclusion, I support the idea of dispensing university education to a high proportion of young people owing to the arguments presented above
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92532467532 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86461489882 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548701298701 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.1131238864 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.416666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218201859527 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952908093306 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590011436533 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156043772363 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453013172834 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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