Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
These days, in some countries elderly people have the permission to work as long as they want. While I agree that this could bring several benefits for them, I also believe it has some detrimental effects, and I will explain why in this essay.
On the one hand, I agree that it could have some advantages for elderly individuals if they were able to work in old age. Firstly, many elderly people tend to stay at home a lot without doing any physical activities, their health would deteriorate as a result. Therefore, being able to go to work can help them maintain and improve their health status. In addition, the olds seem to be dull when they do not often have anything to do in this age, thus going to work is a great opportunity for them to get rid of boredom, they will be able to have lots of fun and interesting communication with their workers instead. Consequently, their mind will become more active, and they may not undergo those negative emotions anymore.
On the other hand, apart from those benefits mentioned above, I think there are several drawbacks that still exist. Although it could be beneficial for many industries and companies to have more and more old people work in their places, the outcome will be unproductive and the efficiency will not be too high since those elderly are not active and lucid like when they were young. Also, because of their old age, they might suffer from unexpected health problems such as heart attack or loss of memory if they were under stress or working too hard. Moreover, I believe that with a high proportion of old people going to work, it can lead to a huge shortage for young workers in industries in the future, because the olds are often rich in experience and profession.
In conclusion, this essay supports the idea that allowing elderly to work brings about certain benefits but negative consequences should not be overlooked. This issue should be considered as a pressing issue to ensure a better future for the next generation.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, while, apart from, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1659.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52727973464 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531428571429 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8507567727 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.615384615 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9230769231 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5384615385 7.06120827912 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28634636709 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104983509994 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902616977654 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162344859604 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721670479225 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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