You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to your friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Navjot,

How are you? I hope this letter will find you very well. As you know that i have finished my graduation this year and now i am planning to move Canada for my tertiary education. Although i have completed my degree with Bachelor of commerce, I have took a decision to continue further study with Business Management. The Lambton College, which is a reputed Canadian college has send me a offer letter. After getting visa i am coming to you.

I want to work three days a week as in order to meet overhead expenses such as house rent, telephone bills, and huge tuition fees. If i would earn some money at the same time I can support my family as our financial position is poor.

I hope you will help me finding a part time job. I will be very thankful if you are able to help me finding a job by giving your reference. It would be easier for me. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Take care and write back soon.
Sarbjeet kaur

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Navjot, How are you? I hope this letter will fin...
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Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...inished my graduation this year and now i am planning to move Canada for my ter...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... this year and now i am planning to move Canada for my tertiary education. Altho...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ar and now i am planning to move Canada for my tertiary education. Although i ha...
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Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...egree with Bachelor of commerce, I have took a decision to continue further study wi...
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'sent'.
Suggestion: sent
...which is a reputed Canadian college has send me a offer letter. After getting visa i...
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Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... a reputed Canadian college has send me a offer letter. After getting visa i am c...
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Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ian college has send me a offer letter. After getting visa i am coming to you. I ...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...d me a offer letter. After getting visa i am coming to you. I want to work th...
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Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ephone bills, and huge tuition fees. If i would earn some money at the same time ...
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Line 7, column 26, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to find' or 'find'.
Suggestion: to find; find
...n is poor. I hope you will help me finding a part time job. I will be very thankfu...
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Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... I hope you will help me finding a part time job. I will be very thankful if you are...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to find' or 'find'.
Suggestion: to find; find
...ery thankful if you are able to help me finding a job by giving your reference. It woul...
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Line 10, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...care and write back soon. Sarbjeet kaur
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, well, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 781.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33888888889 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32338487641 2.54303337028 91% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.688888888889 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2303756659 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.0769230769 76.5299724578 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8461538462 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84615384615 4.34317383033 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 2.54639175258 550% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315986282648 0.216113520407 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100497777068 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756608427997 0.0603063233224 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142605617662 0.12726935374 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109364410392 0.0580467560999 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.9 8.37731958763 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.3 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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