Some people support generous benefits for workers such as high wages, long-term pensions, and comprehensive medical coverage. Others believe that such benefits are impractical. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In this current period of economic crisis, giving generous long term benefits to employees become a contraversial issue. Though it seems a wonderful idea, following it blindly have its own consequences. In this essay I will discuss both views and convince why I feel short term high benefit to employees is better for the company and the economy.

Undoubtedly, a good salary is one of the most important factor of doing a job. It not only provides job satisfaction, but also gives the necessory financial support to employees and their dependents. They can enjoy a better standard of life, with bet...

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Sentence: As a result the share value will drop, no money will be their for new projects, and thus it ultimatily ruin the company.
Description: The tag a determiner, possessive is not usually followed by for
Suggestion: Refer to their and for

Sentence: Employers may forced to cut down the wages, tighten the staff strength, and reduce the production.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to may and forced

Sentence: In this current period of economic crisis, giving generous long term benefits to employees become a contraversial issue.
Error: contraversial Suggestion: controversial

Sentence: It not only provides job satisfaction, but also gives the necessory financial support to employees and their dependents.
Error: necessory Suggestion: necessary

Sentence: All these activities will boost the economy and benefical for all.
Error: benefical Suggestion: beneficial

Sentence: To compensate with that the product become more costive.
Error: costive Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: It further negatively effect the financical gain.
Error: financical Suggestion: financial

Sentence: As a result the share value will drop, no money will be their for new projects, and thus it ultimatily ruin the company.
Error: ultimatily Suggestion: ultimately

Sentence: By all these ways, the frim can use brillient employees and make more profit.
Error: brillient Suggestion: brilliant
Error: frim Suggestion: firm

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No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.244 0.35

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Score: 7.5 out of 9 (The essay can get mark over 8.0 without spelling errors)
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2111 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.519 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.138 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.244 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.44 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Sir..
I used to write the essay with pencil against watch. Then and typing and posting. I cross checked my work with your correction. Usually more than 50% of spelling mistakes are only typing mistakes. I know it is not an excuse. But still I will try...

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Tessy James