Recently, there is a popular debate about whether governments should spend more budgets on supporting athletics. From my perspective, I consider allocating the budget to other burning issues and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
Admittedly, some people hold the view that sponsoring sports is a great way to encourage citizens to exercise. By participating in sports activities, people will start to be interested in exercise. However, fascinated to some thing does not means participate in person, even worst, in order to spend time to support athletics, people sacrifice time which originally would go to gym. As a result, sponsoring sports event might cause opposite effect.
Moreover, art is also more effective way to influence than supporting athletics events to develop a society even the consequences are not directly visible. Art events develop broadly among entire perspectives of society from individuals' awareness to diversifieds social ecology with copious texture of communities that ave significant value. A good example in this point is that our city government decided to improve city museum to larger scale which will allow present more collection. Museum is an efficient medium broadening citizen's awareness to art, through the art education from the project, the residents from various races and groups will have a chance to connect with others. Therefore, investing for the art is a brilliant decision for governments and would not cause any harm.
In addition, poverty is a problem need more attention. Narrow down gap between the rich and poor must be the priority of every governments, and by using budgets originally for sponsor sports, significant measure can be done, and the outcome of the government policy measure might have visible impacts. For instance, government should consider put money in use to build public facilities. Not only improve the quality of citizen's living environment, but also creating job opportunities.
From what has been discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that for government to sustainably develop a society, not financial funding sports will have more advantages.
- TPO34 integrated 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 83
- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 81
- TPO32 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 78
- TPO 43 Independent Writing TaskImagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wai 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43323442136 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94735691797 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605341246291 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3102224713 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4375 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193265988688 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592441143593 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556363003759 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0948789552466 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421184114703 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.