Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the modern world, most people are interested in buying many clothes. However, they spent more time going shopping, they didn't pay attention to saving money. It is known to be serious. Personally, I agree with this view because using a huge amount of time in malls yields some negatives aspects.
To begin with, if the younger only buy some clothes as favorite of them, anything will not have problems. But they are wasting money every day. Just buy anything that is the limited band. Nowadays, most younger could have any money, so they have gotten save money daily. They become "awry shopping" people. They focus on choosing brand names they said that necessary to them. Every time, the malls have hundred people, especially the younger appear there. The young people spend a bit of time working, then spend too much time walking in the malls. They go shopping as hobbies of them, they are totally into it.
At the same time, many businesses could have the opportunity that made to their company have high turnover. They couldn't produce a large amount of products to respond to the youngers about shopping. So the businesses could bring to the society many fake products but only they know. These activities will damage and have a negative on communication.
In conclusion, the younger should consider using time on shopping in the best way. For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that should increase the shopping malls each day of the young people. And only consider the shopping as a simple hobby.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92248062016 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39187173938 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593023255814 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6101605033 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.5 106.682146367 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.9 20.7667163134 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2848781556 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07479818378 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630724675941 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157204843779 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507814950374 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 50.2224549098 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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