Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Your job has a greater effect on one's overall happiness than your social life does
What factors affect people's happiness arouse a heated debate. Some people argue that a person's overall happiness highly depends on one's social life, while others disagree. For me, I believe that my job has a greater influence on my happiness. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, I am a workaholic person, so my job undoubtedly has a more significant effect on my mental mood compared to my social life. For example, I currently worked as an artificial engineer in AIdea Techological Company. Whenever I crafted a high-precision deep learning model by reading state-of-the-art articles, I felt extremely excited to an extent that I cannot fall asleep. Also, I frequently discuss difficult-to-train reinforcement learning models with my colleagues, and we usually become excited whenever we managed to increase the precision of those models by one percent. On the other hand, I only have no more than 10 friends, and most of them are my fellow engineer coworkers. What's worse, we have families to take care of after work, so I did not play video games or watch movies together outside of work. Eventually, I did not acquire any happiness in my social life. Evidently, when it comes to my mental health, my career plays a more important role than my close friends .
In addition, being healthy has a significant effect on my happiness, and participating in an interesting career helps me become happier. For instance, whenever I did some university projects with my friends, they usually procrastinated and tossed all unfinished tasks to me. Thus, I often stay up late, which leads to insomnia. Consequently, I often felt frustrated about the fact that I had to take sleeping pills every day at a really young age. Thus, despite the fact that I had many college friends, my unhealthy body prevented me from feeling glad. Contrarily, I worked as a teacher assistant in my school, and I enjoyed grading students' assignments since I often encountered intriguing solutions to the same algorithm problem. Plus, I like to share ideas and alternative solutions with my students. Therefore, I often felt glad doing my TA job, even though my social life is quite boring.
In conclusion, I believe that my career has a bigger effect on my happiness due to the aforementioned reasons. After all, talent, interest, and health are exceptionally essential to me.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a person; persons
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Suggestion: help
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, after all, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03836317136 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06893162454 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606138107417 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7466779992 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5454545455 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7727272727 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124227046474 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418401423659 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507746164445 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900828806693 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405601287182 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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