Universities often offer a plethora of courses to their students to shape which they can choose to improve in their career prospectives.The prompt however argues between some people believing universities making it mandatory for students to choose from variety of courses to few contradicting this belief and emphasising on them taking courses which align with their careers and improve career prospectives. I agree with the later view and feel students should focus more on the subjects that help them prepare for job opportunities due to three reasons.
To begin, let's consider an example of a student majoring in civil engineering and is currently working on preparing his thesis on a sewage waste treatment management plant. The student might be already occupied with a lot of subjects to qualify in his grad along with thesis papers to write. If the university makes it mandatory to take a course related to British History, that would make learning far more difficult to the student as it does not align with his career interests. Of course some people might argue that taking wide range of courses might improve a person's knowledge in various domains, but in my opinion theoretical knowledge of a subject that the person has taken for a single semester does not improve much knowledge in that field.He would rather be burdened with additional courses and end up receiving less grades in both grades, as he is focused on achieving multiple things half-heartedly, rather than focusing on one important domain. It is always better to have a fully working knowledge in a domain rather than half-heartedly exploring all domains.
Further, there also seems to be a flaw with the first view of people, where they expect to make it mandatory for all students to take variety of courses. This would not interest a lot of students because , every individual has different expectations from university.Some might want to explore new courses while the other's might not be interested in taking courses that do not align their interest at all. So, it's better to include courses that could possibly align with their major studies and can be taken as electives. Why? Because they might come in handy in the later part of their lives. For instance, a student who is taken up drama and cinema as their field of interest could possibly benefit from taking electives in cinematography and editing courses, as that would align with their goal at the same be helpful in future.
Similarly, even though universities are going to make it compulsory for its students to take in mandatory courses, they need to evaluate the structure and difficulty of the course beforehand. Most of the time undergrads tend to get stuck in an unhappy, irrelevant and an unknown course on top of which they have to deal with complex course syllabus. This would reduce their chance in devoting more time to the main domains but would shift their focus to unwanted domains because they are in the apprehension of completing a course, obtain some grade and just get over with it. They would not focus on absorbing the concept but rather focus on just finishing it. Stress and anxiety would be an add on to this result in overall poor performance of the student.
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- Some people believe that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Others believe that universities should not force students to take any courses other than those that will help prepare the 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, similarly, so, while, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2682.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 543.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93922651934 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70499306039 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484346224678 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 842.4 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.579924361 60.3974514979 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.764705882 118.986275619 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9411764706 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286821199616 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910025381039 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662350463772 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186201397971 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599013570952 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.