In this highly competitive world, many students realize that it's not easy to find an ideal job. The issue regarding the way of job searching has never failed to arouse public concerns and at the same time provoke a hot debate about what's the best way to acquire a job position. It's hard to deny that asking friends for help or searching for ads will increase the chance, as they are likely to provide us with more information. Such a fact turns many people into strong believers that these two ways are more effective. However, such a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. Accordingly, I, without hesitation, advocate that it is better for us to send our dream company a letter. I feel this way for two reasons.
First of all, it provides you with a measurable and motivative goal, as you have more control of your movement. To be clear, instead of mindlessly and passively asking friends for help or looking for ads of newspaper, it enables you to take the initiative to act and you can record all your progress by the number of letters. Meanwhile, you are sending letters to the company you like, which gives you a chance to do something you are interested in. Therefore, the extent of the benefit of sending personal statement is clear even to the layperson's eyes, and people should place a heavy emphasis on this solution.
Second,its reliability indicate that people should stick on this solution rather than other choices. When we sending letters to the company, we form a direct contact with it, thus we can get feedback or invitation of interview quickly. Take the case of myself, I used to spend a lot of time to find an summer internship. Unlike my other friends who prefer family connections or browsing LinkedIn, I reached out to my ideal companies directly and send them E-mails attached with my resumes. In the end, I, a student who didn't have excellent GPA, became the first student in my class who find my dream job. Had it not been for this strategy, I would never become a leading figure of my class.
Considering all the arguments and examples given above, we can safely say that it is more beneficial for us to act actively and send letter to our dream jobs based on its measurement and its reliable.
Admittedly, as my favorite quote from Michelle Obama goes, everyone on Earth, was carrying around an unseen history, and that alone formed different opinions. It's understandable that some people may oppose me.
Nevertheless, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, while, i feel, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79194630872 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64043332678 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574944071588 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.013948393 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280271735656 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713691626401 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694389432844 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110763500203 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105202111741 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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