Better life
Nowadays, the competition in society is becoming more and more intense, and the burden on teens is getting bigger heftier. Lots of people are beginning to reminisce about the days when their grandparents were young, and that was the 1950s. If I was were an American, then I might be like them and reminisce about when my parents were younger. But being Chinese , today's life is way better than that period in every single facet.
Our food today was never even dreamed of 50 years ago. China in the 1950s was very poor, and people could eat meat only once a year. Their wish was to have a full stomach every day. What about now? People's expectations of meals are high. We think that it is important to match meat and vegetables with nutrients. Milk, eggs, steak, vegetables, some dogmatic people feel that ordinary vegetables with chemical fertilizers are unhealthy, so they will choose more expensive organic vegetables. According to statistics, the average height of adults in 2020 is a striking 7 cm taller than it was in 1950. This is the most direct result of the progress in food.
The working conditions are even more behind than the food. Teens now think that finding a job is hard, but in the 1950s, finding a job wasn't about the matter of hard or not, it was about the matter of having no opportunity. People could not choose jobs. Instead, they were assigned posts. Every factory has a limited amount of jobs. To the people who lived in cities, only one of many children had the opportunity to get work. The others had to return to rural areas and farm. Compared to the teens of the 1950s, the trouble and difficulties now seem to be easy mode.
Other facets, such as education, medicine, and entertainment are like food and jobs: they are far less advanced than today. In the past 70 years, China has amazing progress thanks to the lack of wars in that period, and people the focused on the economy. 70 years later, if my grandson has the opportunity to answer this question, I hope that he thinks that his life is better.
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| 2022-10-17 | Sumilak | 90 | view |
| 2022-08-09 | ayumiyazaki | 70 | view |
| 2022-03-24 | lhklin | 76 | view |
| 2022-02-18 | TNTMANCHAN | 70 | view |
| 2021-10-06 | pn77 | 80 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...oung, and that was the 1950s. If I was were an American, then I might be like them ...
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Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...them and reminisce about when my parents were younger. But being Chinese , todays...
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Line 1, column 363, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...parents were younger. But being Chinese , todays life is way better than that per...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... working conditions are even more behind than the food. Teens now think that find...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...s hard, but in the 1950s, finding a job wasnt about the matter of hard or not, it was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61538461538 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40646218263 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574175824176 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1697750831 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.0 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1666666667 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 5.45110844103 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0878263054166 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0244501098938 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814020983709 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681991974426 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069049115422 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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