Arctic deer live on islands in Canada’s arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer populations is the result of deer being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
The decline in artic deer which lives in Canada’s arctic region is observed. The author claims that this decrease is because of the global warming trends that caused the sea ice to melt through which deer were able to travel from one island to another. However, the author’s argument is based on many assumptions which should be justified before providing any conclusion.
The habitat needs to be a mixture of hot and cold in order for deer to survive. The climate should be warm enough so that plants could survive on which they feed and cold enough to form ice which covers the sea by which they could travel over separating islands. The artic deer search for their food by migrating from island to island over the year. It might be possible that the providing source of food started decreasing as the weather conditions are extreme in the arctic region. There might also be no means of producing new sources of food. The limiting availability of food could affect the survival of the deer adversely and could cause a decline in their population. Moreover, it could also be possible that the ice does not create a concrete path which makes migrating difficult and thus, affect adversely.
The decline in the number of deer is reported by the local hunters. It might be possible that hunting is the primary reason for their early extinction in the Canadian arctic region. The author has not provided any data about the past population of the deer and the number of deer hunted. Without any promising evidence that hunters are not the reason for their decline, this possibility could not be eliminated.
Moreover, the author has stated the reason for the decline of deer is because of global warming. Based on the reports of the recent trends of global warming, the sea ice is melting. Through this report, it cannot be inferred anything about Canada’s arctic region. It might be the overall melting of ice or there might be a decline in one specific region. Moreover, the amount by which the sea ice is declined is not mentioned. The decline might be insignificant. Also, the decline of ice could be due to other factors other than global warming. The global warming reports do not justify the author’s argument.
In conclusion, the author needs to provide more data to justify the conclusion. The decline in the population of the artic deer in Canada’s arctic region could be because of various factors which should be considered and evaluated before reaching any conclusion.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2015 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.741 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.345 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.708 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.522 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.458 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...y could travel over separating islands. The artic deer search for their food by mig...
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Line 6, column 68, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...ated the reason for the decline of deer is because of global warming. Based on the reports...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88235294118 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49033453375 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407058823529 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2916439971 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4583333333 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7083333333 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278724760674 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856928201747 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918089547971 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162865568985 0.128457276422 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102294362454 0.0628817314937 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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