Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Financially management is one of the important lesson that everyone should learn in their lives. Many people state that we should learn it as soon as possible, even we are at a young age. However, in my point of view, I think it is too fast to learn while we have little knowledge about the world and society.
First and foremost, It is too difficult for children to learn managing their money. Especially at the age of counting one to a hundred, how can they actually have a basic concept of money? For example, when I was in elementary school, the painting class ask us to buy the tool at store. All I understand is buying thing that needed in class, not figuring out what my parents bought me a complete set of painting toolkit. Even when I was in junior high school, I just cannot well understand the thing I had bought is expensive or not, let alone the children younger than me.
Secondly, children are too busy to learn so many subjects, so the priority of this is not that important. In Taiwan, we have to learn a lot of subjects, including Chinese, math, society, science, English before high school. After graduating junior high, the subjects even increase, and the workload becomes heavier. In addition, some of children still have to learn skill like piano, dancing, or other interest they like after class, so there is no time for them to learn money management which have no direct effect to their near life.
Lastly, children's lives are so simple that there is no so many thing that they need to buy. That is, managing their money have no use in their lives. For example, most of children's lives are starting with going to school, learning, going back home, and finally sleeping. If their parents give them money, they have little chance to spend it and finally wasting it on things that they do not really like. So it is more suitable to start learning it when they have more chance to spend money, like in college, so they can actually learn the trade of between what they need and what they want.
In conclusion, I disagree the point that children should learn to manage money at a young age, because it is too early to learn the skill in that situation, when they cannot easily understand the concept of the management and the importance of responsibility.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to manage'.
Suggestion: to manage
... is too difficult for children to learn managing their money. Especially at the age of c...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the children') or simply say ''some children''.
Suggestion: some of the children; some children
... workload becomes heavier. In addition, some of children still have to learn skill like piano, d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...lives are so simple that there is no so many thing that they need to buy. That is, managin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61274509804 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40713727918 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480392156863 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4632922878 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.555555556 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214992520662 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808870254831 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686948540622 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144006757892 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524030744191 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to manage'.
Suggestion: to manage
... is too difficult for children to learn managing their money. Especially at the age of c...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the children') or simply say ''some children''.
Suggestion: some of the children; some children
... workload becomes heavier. In addition, some of children still have to learn skill like piano, d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...lives are so simple that there is no so many thing that they need to buy. That is, managin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61274509804 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40713727918 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480392156863 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4632922878 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.555555556 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214992520662 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808870254831 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686948540622 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144006757892 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524030744191 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.