Tpo15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at young age Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

people have different thoughts and ideas regarding whether financial management for children is crucial at an early age. certainly, some people, if asked, would disagree that children should not learn to manage money at a young age. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that children need to learn how to manage their money. my views can be greatly substantiated by the reasons addressed below.

firstly, it is important to consider that children can learn to save their money and spend their money in the future. certainly, people tend to face difficulties paying rent, bills, or tuition fees. however, in most cases, learning how to manage their money at a young age can be beneficial when paying a monthly fee. my personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. for example, since high school when I was doing part-time jobs, I started to save my money for 4 months. consequently, I was able to pay for the tuition fee of my English class. in this regard, the management of money can be beneficial in the future.

Second of all, students can learn the value of money. it would be fair to say that young people who did not learn how to manage their money do not save much money. on the other hand, a student who knows how to utilize their money knows how to control the budget. take the case of Alex, a friend of mine who did not spend money most time. presently, he now plans to buy his own house with the money he kept from an early age. in this respect, money management at an early age can be imperative for the comfy of oneself.

all in one, everyone may hold different views on the issue. yet, I absolutely support the perspective that youngsters should learn to manage money at their age.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, for example, in most cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59415584416 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5045813142 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50974025974 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.9095135341 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.4736842105 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287069593683 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993839582961 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879972874588 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204673782007 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514550581089 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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