Many people today prefer socializing online to spending time with friends in local community.
Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
These days, more people buy things like vehicles, clothing, and other products made by well-known brands. I think vanity, social media, and need for better products are the reasons for this trend, and I think it is a negative change in society.
There are several reasons that explain why people are obsessed with branded goods. First, they love flaunting their possessions because they believe it elevates their value as a person. Business magnates, entertainers, and the wives of politicians, for instance, use their Gucci bags, Lamborghinis, and Samsung phones to tell people they are wealthy and are above their class. Another factor is social media because in order for influencers to earn money, they need to show support to these big-named brands and lure their followers to make purchases. Finally, high-end products are made from the highest quality materials and have advanced designs, so it is easy to understand why people want them.
The tendency to purchase products based on its name is a detrimental trend because people overspend on things that do not matter. Most of these items are overpriced because consumers are not only paying for the product, but they are also paying for the name behind it. In Korea, many young adults took out loans to afford such luxuries and are now buried in debt. It may get to a point where people become stricken by poverty due to their carelessness in spending. This can even lead the country to suffer a kind of economic recession on account of the national debt going up in the long term.
In conclusion, people’s egotism, social media influencers, and the quality of these products are the reasons why it is trendy now to buy branded items, but it is inimical to society and the national economy.
- Many people today prefer socializing online to spending time with friends in local community Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 67
- 3 People are surrounded by many kinds of advertising which can influence their life Does the positive effect of this trend outweigh negative effects 61
- 3 People are surrounded by many kinds of advertising which can influence their life Does the positive effect of this trend outweigh negative effects 61
- 3 People are surrounded by many kinds of advertising which can influence their life Does the positive effect of this trend outweigh negative effects 61
- Developed countries often give financial aid to developing countries but it does not solve poverty so developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid 11
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also, but, finally, first, may, so, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95608108108 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53391666318 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587837837838 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 0.809619238477 988% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1537665232 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.846153846 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0877304308435 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0342989455017 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.026565797785 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0550968348911 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00672203755816 0.056905535591 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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