The pie charts illustrates the proportion of men and women worker in country A and country B

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The pie charts illustrates the proportion of men and women worker in country A and country B

The pie charts illutrates the proportion of men and women worker in country A and country B
The intial impression from the pie charts is that services are the most favour job among the tow gender worker in the 2 given countries . on the other hand a few men and women choose to work in agriculture.
In the country A, male worker chosse service work more than female workers do it at 49 percent and 56 percent, respectively. The numbers of women chossing agriculture as a job for them to make a living is 43 percent which is nearly 2 times the figure for men. In contrast, only 8 percent female workers have a job in industry. This proportion is a half comparies with that of male ones
With reference to country B. Most male and female workers decide to find a job in the service. The number of female worker choose this occupation accounts for two third compared to the proportion of men at 65 percent and 88 percent, respectively. The percentage of men in having job industry threefold the proportion of women agriculture attracts very little workforce in this country(at 3 percent for male and 1 percent for female)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
... women worker in country A and country B The intial impression from the pie chart...
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...w gender worker in the 2 given countries . on the other hand a few men and women c...
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...ender worker in the 2 given countries . on the other hand a few men and women choo...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... a half comparies with that of male ones With reference to country B. Most male a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
third, in contrast, with reference to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59701492537 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69062935479 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512437810945 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7339242987 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385189483252 0.215688989381 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16316472865 0.103423049105 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168075324541 0.0843802449381 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37938310584 0.15604864568 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.26781691958 0.0819641961636 327% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... women worker in country A and country B The intial impression from the pie chart...
^^^
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...w gender worker in the 2 given countries . on the other hand a few men and women c...
^^
Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...ender worker in the 2 given countries . on the other hand a few men and women choo...
^^
Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a half comparies with that of male ones With reference to country B. Most male a...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
third, in contrast, with reference to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 924.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59701492537 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69062935479 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512437810945 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7339242987 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385189483252 0.215688989381 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16316472865 0.103423049105 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168075324541 0.0843802449381 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37938310584 0.15604864568 243% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.26781691958 0.0819641961636 327% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.