Plan A below shows a health center in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. Summaries the information.

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Plan A below shows a health center in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. Summaries the information.

The plans show how a health center is changed between 2005 and present. Looking at the glance to these plans illustrates that although the devoted ground do not have changed, the present health center is remodeled.

There are several significant differences between old health center and present center. The capacity of car parking has doubled from 12 spaces to 30 spaces. More over, the size of garden is reduced significantly and replaced by minor operations room and car parking. Looking more closely at the present health center show that the size of consulting rooms is decreased and the other one is added to them which name is CR4.

The situation of reception desk is changed to near the entrance and in front of the children’s play area in the present while people found it in front of entrance in 2005. In conclusion, it is obvious that the present health center is designed better than the old health center.

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Sentence: Looking more closely at the present health center show that the size of consulting rooms is decreased and the other one is added to them which name is CR4.
Description: The fragment center show that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace show with shows

Sentence: The situation of reception desk is changed to near the entrance and in front of the children's play area in the present while people found it in front of entrance in 2005.
Description: The word near is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to near

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