There is an increasing debate on whether people could do things well when they have a wide variety of exposure to different things. Some people believe that they can not perform things well because they are busy doing so many different things. However, others do not agree with it and hold different opinions. From my point of view, I think people can still do things well even if they are busy doing different things and I will explore my idea in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, having different kinds of exposure is good for mental health and can release pressure. It is tired if people keep focusing on specific tasks for a long time. People need to attend different activities to relax and get refreshed. Drawing from my own experience, I am a graduate student who is busy with my chemistry research. Every day, I spend a lot of time doing experiments in labs and reading research papers. Therefore, I like to go swimming during lunchtime and play basketball after finishing the lab experiments. In addition, I attend dance clubs during weekends and volunteer at a kindergarten every Monday morning. Through attending these activities, I can forget the overwhelming pressure from my research and recharge myself during exercises and volunteering. I have found that after I participated in these activities, I become more focused on my research and am making progress on my experiments. For this reason, I think doing many different things can help me do things well.
Secondly, exploring different fields can broaden people's horizons so that it can enhance their work. Trying a wide range of things helps people to see things from different perspectives and build connections. Take my sister as an example, she is a product manager at a tech company. She enjoys attending different kinds of social activities such as wine-tasting events and coffee chats and traveling to different places when she has time. She thinks that by having tons of different exposures, she can know people better and become a good bridge between their colleagues. She also can have more connections and common topics to build relationships with her colleagues. As a result, her career goes very smoothly. She has obtained several promotions since she joined her company.
In light of the reasons above, I disagree with the statement that people do very few things well because they are busy doing so many things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
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Suggestion: many
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...a good bridge between their colleagues. She also can have more connections and comm...
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...motions since she joined her company. In light of the reasons above, I disagre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, i think, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74525451749 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524875621891 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5782102856 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3913043478 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4782608696 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405679361016 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125549588454 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16530631239 0.0737576698707 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.348877342899 0.150856017488 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.220553438564 0.0645574589148 342% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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