Family has always been on top when it comes to the list of the most important things in life. However, as society has changed drastically over the past decades, there is also a shift in the way people identify and value their families. This explains why nowadays people tend to focus more on their nuclear family than on their extended relatives.
The first reason why the importance of extended family has shrunk significantly today can be pointed to the growing physical distance between family members. In the past, all generations of a big family were likely to live in the same house or in the same neighborhood. This closeness helped the members to form a strong bond and a generally interdependent relationship with each other. However, that is no longer the case for today's society. Nowadays, it is not uncommon to see family members move out as soon as they can. As all branches of an extended family scatter around the town, or even the world, their kinship seems to fade away and begin to be superseded by the connections with new neighbors who are not family but might be the first to help us out in an emergency.
Another reason why same-blood relatives have started to increasingly lose their position can be blamed on the busy life. For previous generations, family and relatives could be considered a part of their daily life. In fact, it would be unusual if a family didn’t meet up on a regular basis. I remember when I was a kid, all of my aunts and uncles' families would gather at my house every weekend. The adults would feast and start to catch up with each other even though they saw each other every week, and the children would just have fun. That was how I got to know all of my relatives and felt very comfortable striking up a random conversation with them. On the contrary, everyone seems to be so busy with work and their own family that the frequency of our family gatherings started to drop to only twice or three times a year. That was not to mention not all family members attend every meeting. I could feel that we has begun to grow apart ever since busy life took away our precious time. Less time spent together equals less strong connection, which leads to the lack of interaction among the members. Consequently, we gradually become more of acquaintances than blood relatives.
In conclusion, I believe the growing physical and mental distance due to the hectic pace of life has reduce the importance of extended family for most people. Even if this change is inevitable, somehow our relatives still have a special spot in our heart that if they are ever in need, we are always willing to give hand.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 923, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...end every meeting. I could feel that we has begun to grow apart ever since busy lif...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
...ance due to the hectic pace of life has reduce the importance of extended family for m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, still, in conclusion, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64818763326 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55523227842 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526652452026 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.059467816 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0909090909 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161232018565 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477335679269 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324356323637 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949066764092 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287168107384 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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