A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The author claims that the people of the Himalayas do not receive any professional dental
help for tooth decay, on the contrary the citizens of the United States of America visit the
dentist on an average, 1.25 times a year. However, the citizens in the USA show higher
levels of tooth decay than to those living in the Himalayas. The author finally claims that
regular dental care is not helpful to protect teeth against decay, however the author fails to
persuade me with the claims being made.
There exists only a mention of ‘professional’ help not being provided to the Himalayans in
relation to dental care for tooth decay, it may then leave oneself seem to wonder if the
people of the Himalayas are being treated for tooth decay with some local methodologies.
Ayurveda may be one such source of local treatment being provided to the locals. The
author mentions that the citizens of the USA only, on an average visit the dentist 1.25 times
a year, which in comparison to the 365 days present in the year, do not account to a lot.
Hence why his comments on regular dental care being useless to prevent tooth decay seem
unpersuasive.
The author also mentions how the locals of Himalaya experience lower levels of tooth decay
in comparison to the people of the USA, which may also mean that a larger amount of
people in the Himalayas experience tooth decay to a lower level, while a smaller amount of
people in the USA experience tooth decay but on a larger adverse level. The diet of those
living in these two different parts of the world may differ massively, resulting in tooth decay
for some while stronger teeth for the other. The Himalayas are known for their adverse
conditions, life in these adverse conditions could well and truly result in strong immunity of
the people living here against tooth decay.
Regular dental care however, can prove to be a contributing factor in maintaining the overall
health of one’s teeth. Regular check ups being done by the people of the USA may prove
helpful in the long run. However, the authors claim on how regular dental check-ups are not
helpful in preventing tooth decay may not be backed up with suitable evidence making it
unlikely for it to be considered.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1794 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.636 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.344 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.057 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.923 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[7]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be'.
Suggestion: to be
...ly a mention of ‘professional’ help not being provided to the Himalayans in relation...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... in the year, do not account to a lot. Hence why his comments on regular dental care...
^^^^^
Line 20, column 46, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ome while stronger teeth for the other. The Himalayas are known for their adverse ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86046511628 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4699571643 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441860465116 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.292314151 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.692307692 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7692307692 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 26.0 5.15768463074 504% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143063162129 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588068973707 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526785295773 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0518668175598 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0598384601248 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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