The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how peopleshould live think and behave However some people believe that these ideasare not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life To whatextent do you agree or disagree

Submitted by vocongdat on Wed, 07/19/2023 - 05:21

It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often seem
incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that some traditional
ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still useful and should not be forgotten

On the one hand, many of the ideas that elderly people have about life are becoming
less relevant for younger people. In the past, for example, people were advised to
learn a profession and find a secure job for life, but today’s workers expect much more
variety and diversity from their careers. At the same time, the ‘rules’ around
relationships are being eroded as young adults make their own choices about who
and when to marry. But perhaps the greatest disparity between the generations can
be seen in their attitudes toward gender roles. The traditional roles of men and
women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted as necessary or
appropriate by most younger people.

On the other hand, some traditional views and values are certainly applicable
modern world. For example, older generations attach great importance to working
hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride in one’s work, and these behaviors can surely
benefit young people as they enter today’s competitive job market. Other
characteristics that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners.
In our globalized world, young adults can expect to come into contact with people
from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than ever to treat others
with respect. Finally, I believe that young people would lead happier lives if they had a
more ‘old-fashioned’ sense of community and neighborliness.
In conclusion, although the views of older people may sometimes seem unhelpful in
today’s world, we should not dismiss all traditional ideas as irrelevant.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...ccepted as necessary or appropriate by most younger people. On the other hand, some trad...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37837837838 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85044657094 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5267993264 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248135080154 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833538468855 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592601954449 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618874875438 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498805450307 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...ccepted as necessary or appropriate by most younger people. On the other hand, some trad...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37837837838 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85044657094 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5267993264 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.666666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248135080154 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833538468855 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592601954449 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618874875438 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498805450307 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.