The vice president of Climpson Industries claims that in order to improve employee productivity, the company should monitor employees' internet use. He suggests that workers who use the internet on their workstations for personal or recreational purposes should be punished, so workers would spend more time on work and achieve higher productivity. However, to properly evaluate this claim, some assumptions need to be examined.
Firstly, the vice president states that installing internet use monitoring software could reduce the time workers spend on personal or recreational use. Yet, this claim depends on the assumption that the device at each worker's workstation is the only device they can use during work. If workers can also use smartphones or smartwatches, they might just shift their time using the computer on the workstation to their own phones or watches, doing things that are not related to work. If this assumption is not verified, it would be hard to evaluate this claim.
Secondly, the assumption that reducing internet use time for personal or recreational purposes can improve worker productivity might not always be true. If a worker focuses on work for a long period of time, they will need some time to rest and relax, otherwise they might start to get distracted or tired. Under these circumstances, not only would work productivity drop, but the quality of work might also be affected. Therefore, if this situation happens, then installing the software would not be a good choice.
Lastly, the claim depends on the assumption that the software is well-designed and cannot be easily broken. For instance, if this company consists of skillful computer programmers, then the monitoring software could be easily broken down by the workers. Furthermore, if the detection system is not accurate enough, it might cause many problems. For example, if there is a worker in the purchasing department ordering toners for the company online, and the system detects that they are doing something not related to work and they get punished wrongly. Or someone accidentally clicks on an advertisement on a website while they are doing some research for work. Hence, if the monitoring software is not well-designed, the claim would not stand.
In conclusion, the recommendation is flawed due to some unwarranted assumptions. If the vice president could provide more evidence about the assumptions above, such as a survey about employees' usage of cellphones at work or reports from other companies that have used the software, then it would be possible to thoroughly evaluate the recommendation.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2138 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.152 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.862 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.695 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
... the assumption that the device at each workers workstation is the only device they can...
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Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... If a worker focuses on work for a long period of time, they will need some time to rest and r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30120481928 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95768188467 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472289156627 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4910098922 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.789473684 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.89473684211 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186436303467 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669363392075 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109767925013 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128759352144 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832363303337 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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