Due to several factors such as climate change, urban expansion, and industrial development, the populations of many species have decreased or even gone extinct. The claim that society should only protect endangered species if their endangerment is the result of human activities is misguided, and I disagree with it for the following reasons.
Firstly, protecting endangered animals can create more benefits than people might imagine. Thus, society should try their best to preserve those animals, whether their potential endangerment is caused by humans or not. For instance, if a species of deer is endangered due to a severe drought in their forest habitat, the government could try to resolve the drought in order to save the deer. By doing so, not only can the deers live in a better habitat, the air quality in that area could also improve since forests play an important role in clarifying the air. If the government does nothing because the drought is not caused by human activities, not only will the precious species die off, air quality might also worsen. Therefore, the society should protect endangered species, whether or not the cause is human activities, as doing so not only protects the animals but also benefits people.
Secondly, it might take time for experts to find out what causes a species to become endangered. When the experts do find out that human activities are harming the species, it might be too late for society to start planning and saving them. For example, if an animal expert finds out that the population of a particular fish has been decreasing for some time and launches an appeal to the public to protect the species, but the society and government refuse to help because they are not sure whether the cause is human activities, the species might eventually disappear. Therefore, society should take action as soon as possible if a species is potentially endangered, in case it is too late.
Some might argue that the government's attempts to deal with every issue of potentially endangered animals will be costly. However, protecting these animals also means protecting the environment, making it a worthy investment. Therefore, I disagree with the statement that society should only take responsibility when the species is threatened by human activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 782, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...iety should protect endangered species, whether or not the cause is human activities, as doing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13563829787 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75746317428 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1253117905 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.733333333 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256611375921 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100758789968 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066019191589 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173794240135 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258964904137 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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