A group of developers in Monroe suggested that opening a jazz club in Monroe would be a profitable business, given the success of a recent jazz festival and the popularity of a local radio jazz show, coupled with the fact that the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away. However, this claim requires proper evaluation and supporting evidence.
To evaluate their claim, it is necessary to determine the number of local attendees among the 100,000 people who attended last year's jazz festival. If most of the festival-goers were from other cities far away from Monroe, the jazz club may not be a success. Therefore, the number of local attendees can help to determine the potential customer base for the new jazz club.
Secondly, it is important to understand how much local jazz lovers like the nearest jazz club, C-Note. If most local jazz enthusiasts are already satisfied with C-Note's environment and staff, they may not be interested in visiting a new jazz club. If the developers can provide evidence that shows many local residents who like jazz clubs are willing to try a new bar that is closer to them, then this claim could be supported.
Lastly, the developers claimed that a local radio show is popular, but it is necessary to have more data on the local audience of the show. For example, how many local listeners are willing to visit a new jazz club? If most jazz enthusiasts prefer to stay home and listen to jazz music comfortably, the new jazz club may not become very popular.
Without supporting evidence, the developers' claim is flawed. However, if they can provide more information, such as the number of local attendees at the jazz festival, the willingness of locals to try a new jazz club, and the number of local listeners who are interested in visiting a new jazz club, their claim may be strengthened.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1471 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.67 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.547 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.248 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.449 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, then, therefore, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8253968254 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64214729015 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469841269841 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9644871886 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.923076923 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193343812183 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828284840745 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815808026197 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138209239793 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774774628194 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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