Some people get into debt by buying things they don t need and can t afford What are reasons for these behaviors What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem

Recently, shopping has become an integral aspect of everyone’s lives. Whether it is require or not, people will enjoy it thoroughly and sometimes land themselves in bankrupt conditions. This essay will discuss about causes behind this attitude and offer few measures.
Firstly, some people would love to showoff their social status which is common among celebrities and high society families. Internal satisfaction can be achieved by showcasing their luxurious and expensive purchases. Secondly, if they see some sort of ongoing sale or discount offers, then they get tempted and buy unnecessary items. Moreover, due to advent of online shopping, loans and EMI options the scenario has become worse. According to one study, the average persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario in metropolitan and developed countries.
However, there are few measures that can be taken to neglect this kind of behavior. Making a budget and sticking adherent to it. Although it may sound difficult but once gets into practice it becomes easier. Apart from that, going for shopping during sale or discounted season should be avoided as much as possible. Also implication of strict punishments rules must be enforced by government who are unable to repay loans and debts.
To conclude, shopping can be fun when it comes to buying necessary things. Otherwise, it can lead people to get in trouble. Making list of things require and having good self control can be two essential key factors to avoid people getting in kind of trouble.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...pect of everyone’s lives. Whether it is require or not, people will enjoy it thoroughly...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...erage persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario ...
^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...erage persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario ...
^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[2]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...erage persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario in me...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... should be avoided as much as possible. Also implication of strict punishments rules...
^^^^
Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...void people getting in kind of trouble.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, apart from, kind of, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1309.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21513944223 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65073506907 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.693227091633 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2084733379 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7647058824 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296319172728 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787583332209 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681035755057 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16004167617 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733346489869 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...pect of everyone’s lives. Whether it is require or not, people will enjoy it thoroughly...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...erage persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario ...
^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...erage persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario ...
^
Line 2, column 502, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[2]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...erage persons getting bankrupted in U.S.A only is 25%. This is a common scenario in me...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... should be avoided as much as possible. Also implication of strict punishments rules...
^^^^
Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...void people getting in kind of trouble.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, apart from, kind of, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1309.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21513944223 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65073506907 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.693227091633 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2084733379 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7647058824 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296319172728 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787583332209 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681035755057 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16004167617 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733346489869 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.